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30.09.2008, 18:11 quote

s6boystu
s6boystu Joined: 06 Mar 2008 Posts: 2074 Location: United Kingdom, England, Essex
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another random one that just kinda flowed onto a piece of paper..

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There's a look in your eyes,
when you look at me
not a sparkle - more like fire
more like hatred than desire,
I don't know what i've done
most likely never will
I've thought about it long and hard,
ran scenario's through my head
stayed up late just thinking
what i could do to make things change
but change is not that easy
i'm bound to make mistakes
after all, i'm just a man..
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30.09.2008, 19:14 quote

rocketgirl
rocketgirl Joined: 17 Jun 2008 Posts: 1951 Location: United Kingdom, England, Hampshire
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Ya know, in my head that ended quite naturally thus:

...I am after all, just a man......
With more important things to waste my time thinking about!

I loved the poem, t'is strange though how my sarcastic mind just continued beyond the end....

 

30.09.2008, 19:50 quote

s6boystu
s6boystu Joined: 06 Mar 2008 Posts: 2074 Location: United Kingdom, England, Essex
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Thanks.. i think Laughing

i could have actually added about another 3 or 4 lines to it, but didn't want people thinking... oh god stu's on one again.. Laughing
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30.09.2008, 19:57 quote

rocketgirl
rocketgirl Joined: 17 Jun 2008 Posts: 1951 Location: United Kingdom, England, Hampshire
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It *is* a beautiful poem.
I'm just in one of those Unsentimental moods tonight....give it a few days and I will be re-reading it with tears in my eyes. Embarassed

 

01.10.2008, 05:52 quote

LittleVixen
LittleVixen Joined: 11 Oct 2006 Posts: 7493 Location: United Kingdom, England, Cornwall
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Stu thats lovely, but you know me i'm a soppy one Crying or Very sad
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