This is what I spent most of the weekend trying to write. I think I finally have the finished version.

I had a writers block for a little while.

Any comments/critism welcome!


Broken hearts,
Lonely hearts,
World crumbling and crashing down,
Nothing makes sense.

A pot of bubbling, boiling liquid,
Threatens to explode from too much pressure
And yet people still come and feed you their problems,
Their sorrow,
Their pain,
Stop! Can you not see I cannot take much more?
And yet you continue to hold on,
You keep it together,
Keep everything from falling apart.

Tears fall where they may,
Strength attempts to fail,
But you hang on,
You try to maintain your sanity.

Your heart feels as though
Someone has it in a vise,
Squeezing it,
Trying to shatter it.

You need your life back,
You need for your heart to be yours again.

it's very very good laura.

i really liked it. so expressive. so....... you

i think i could tell that .... the poem was very frustrated.... and i felt that quite clearly so don't worry lol you succeeded in writing yet another fabulous piece.

Thanks

i didnt like it much, i was unable to relate to some of the imagery, such as....

Your heart feels as though
Someone has it in a vise,
Squeezing it,
Trying to shatter it.


sounds a bit violent to me, all a bit tense and stressful.

laura u always pull from the deepest part of your soul and always gets me in the gut....i myself can picture it all..been there done that...makes me cry dam it...

dont be sorry sweetie...just makes me know i still have feelings and knowing someone as young as you as had so much pain already, makes me feel for you so much...luvs ya, hope you know that

Love you too, faith!

A Lovely Poem, i always feel for you when i read your poems, wish i could take away some of your pain and hurt! This is one thing ive missed whil ive been away!
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Love you all
Matt xx