Bliss if you wrote this then you better post some more, i love the imagery you use in this

Never spotted this before! Is very very good

I usually avoid commenting on the poetry on these boards (for fairly obvious reasons), but this is actually rather good, particularly the opening lines.

If I was being hyper-critical, you don`t need to use antiquated language and grammar ("thy", "fear do not") to lend your poetry gravitas. It stands up by its own merit, not period pastiche.