I really enjoyed your story Susan. Well written and quite exciting! Initially I wasn't going to read it because I thought it a bit long for a forum post. Glad I did take the time though.

i'll be honest ... it bored the tits off me

I've never read anything like it - had a very sheltered upbringing and had it drummed into me not to even be curious enough to peek as an adult.
But i did skim through this - mainly cuz it was very long, and i felt a twinge of guilt - so didnt read it all, just got the gist and it made me giggle. Is it suppose to be erotic? I'm obviously not ya mainstream reader of this sort of thang in all fairness, if it were a whole book i would have given up at the first paragraph. But i can see why anyone without my 'narrow-mindedness' might enjoy it.
I loved the harry potter spoof better, but suspect that too would not be able to keep my interest after a while. Because of me, not the author's work.