no not an ASW post

i've just re-done my profile on one of the other sites and am kinda thinking maybe it's a tad long... well, mostly boring..

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welcome to my profile!!! Before you read on, i'd like you to understand this. I am a person, i have feelings too. I'm not the wealthiest person in the world but i make do with what i do have. If you're into loaded blokes who flash the cash all the time, you're looking at the wrong profile. How do you sell yourself in a box this size ? ! I guess i'll just be honest and see what happens. First off, i have a son, who lives down in Plymouth (devon) with his mum, so i get to travel a bit ! I'm quite shy too, which can, has and does cause problems with some people, so bear it in mind if you do message ! I think of myself as an average fella ! I'm honest, caring, reliable, mad !! (not quite certifiable yet though ) and forgiving - not sure if that's a good or bad thing though.. I like pretty much the normal list of hobbies that everyone uses, going on random long drives just to find a brew and the like ! ( i do looove tea!! ). I have a very strange sense of humour and i'm kinda free spirited, but i think it's time for me to start looking to settle down (hence why i'm on here). I'm a bit on the soft side, holding hands and cuddles and all that stuff appeal to me ( just don't tell anyone ok ?! ). Not really into the clubbing scene any more, doesn't bother me if a partner goes out - it's good to have your own 'things' apparently - although i'm not looking to sponsor an alchy !! I'm currently trying to better myself, i've always been a make do kinda person but a few things have happened recently that made me realise that i shouldn't just settle for that, it can't hurt to try.. right ? !. I started out by quiting smoking and i've joined the local gym ! Music wise, i'll listen to pretty much anything with a catchy tune, but my mp3 player will always have a bit of rock / metal on it ! My taste in films is also quite vast, love comedies and action films, but don't mind the odd rom/com too !! oh !! and i'm looking forward to Resident Evil 4 coming out this year !!! Now.. if you managed to trawl through all that and your still interested, give me a shout Thanks for looking Stu. =D *edit* been 4 months free of smoking now !! *Edit #2* I don't do text speak. If you want to talk / message then please do it properly, i can't be doing with translating messages !

too long ? too boring ? too negative ? too me ?
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i think it's abit too long and leaves nothing to the imagination.

Shorten it a little, dont list EVERYTHING about you there so people get curious si?

Si, si.

A bit too long and too many exclamation marks. It's a good profile but needs condensing.

In my experience, women are not that interested in reading too much about a man. They like funny off the wall profiles. I got a lot of responce when I put a jokey profile up, that said little about me.

Perhaps you should run two profiles Stu with identical pics, one with a minimal amount of detail and another with the longer write up and see which profile gets the views/responses. It could be an interesting experiment.

hmn.. interesting replies. Scottie, can't be arsed with that

how about something like this..

1 ) i like tea lots.

2 ) i have a son in plymouth.

3 ) i have a mad sense of humour

4 ) i like most music

5 ) i like most films

6 ) can't be arsed with going out clubbing anymore

7 ) if you read this in mono-tone you'll sound like an answer phone.

8 ) if you tried it, your a pillock

yes.. im bored and trying to think up an intruiging sales brochure about myself isn't helping.
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I agree with most of the above.
It does need to be shorter, although my own profile is probably as long!
And you should definitely keep the humour in.

A rearranged version of your 8-pointer:

I like tea and lots of it.
I drink it morn and night.
I have a sense of humour,
And I also like to write.

I like almost any films,
Even with the dubbing.
And I like most music,
But I don’t like clubbing.

I have a son in Plymouth,
Who means the world to me.
Sometimes I go to see him.
And we share a cup of tea!
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Give me golf clubs, fresh air and a beautiful partner, and you can keep the clubs and the fresh air.
(Jack Benny)

Id get rid of the first paragraph, it comes across to needy and makes it clear you have been hurt before, i wouldnt read past that bit tbh!

Id shorten the long paragraph too.

I would go for the two profiles, its not too much effort, otherwise you wouldnt be asking our advice would you?

well i made a second profile with all cheery stuff and all that jazz and all that happened was, i got messaged asking why i had 2 profiles
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im crap at profiles to man so your not alone lol

I'd keep or even double the length of the original version.

If you're after someone committed, attentive and truly interested in you, and serious about starting a lasting relationship, she will take the time to read it, analyse it and compare it to her own requirements.

If she hasn't the time, attention nor interest to read it all, and digest it, then you've saved yourself from a time waster.

Although the number of messages you get from members will be far smaller - due to the length and detail in the profile, you can rest assured that the messages you do get will be more likely to be worthwhile, more probable as being from people on the same wavelength, and thus, from those more likely to seek and also offer the same values.